RSS

Tag Archives: writing

A kid discovers swearing

It was the first time he hear a swearing , the man shouted angrily at the little boy mother with the word with four letters F U C K …and then it was followed by You , John knew the word that the man just shouted at his mother had a bad meaning but he did not know what it was , he looked at his mother she was holding her face in her two hands , while tears came down running her cheeks , he quickly ran to his mother tucked on her skirt , he did not know what to do . He just did not feel right , seeing his mother in that situation , he did not know what he should do … tears started forming in his eyes , while he was looking at here .. calling her Mom .. Mom …

 

That scene was printed in John’s mind , the details second by second they were deeply dug into his memories , he just could not erase them , it was the day in which his life turned into a narrow angle…

 

Sitting on the stool at the bar enjoying his vodka shots, sipping the drink slowly , while feeling the burning in his mouth , he came back to this world , after being lost in his childhood world for an instant, the first thing he noticed was the blonde bar waitress staring at him, whom she flashed a smile , and asked : “is everything all right?

 

Yes , its just a bad day, replied John. He looked at his watch it says 11:35 am , and he looked back at the waitress who were still standning there , he was not in the mood for a conversation now… that when he remembered, he had something to be done at 12pm sharp … killing the man who said the four letter word to his mother , the word which changed his life and started his misery ….

 

It has been 10 years since that time , John was 8 when the incident happened. His mother passed a few days back from sickness and hunger ,  John had took an oath upon himself that he must avenge his mother and the only thing which could bring satisfaction to his mind right now was killing the man who ended his mother’s life or as he thought it happened that way ….

 

John went outside of the bar, crossed the streets , walking from corner to corner he kept of track of time , hoping to arrive on his destination at time , he was following the man since two days , he had him tracked , all the shops, the places he visited , his journey from his house to his office , the bus he took , the train he would always hurry to catch , it was all pinned down …John mind was only focused on one thing , killing that man ….

 

He felt it was his duty to repay his mother , and repaying her he thought would be b killing the man who changed their life, the man who came to their house and told them to pack their things and leave now because they did not pay the mortgage fees for over 3 months , and the bank would not tolerate any more excuses , and after a few hours of arguing and explaining to John’s mom that he was only doing his job , and she should leave otherwise he would call the police and have John’s mother arrested and John will be sent to one of the social care centers…after putting it all to thought John’s mother could not find a way to avoid all this but to leave and keep her son by her side…

 

After being left by her husband who was spending a life sentence in prison for murder , a crime which he was too foolish to commit, he murdered his best friend while he was drunk after they had an argument over who should win the world cup …..

 

Time was passing very fast, second after second , everything was going smoothly as John planned.. he was waiting at one of the street corners , waiting for the man to come out of the bank and arrive at the bus stop to wait for the bus like he does everyday …. John spotted him , he was wearing a grey suit , walking slowly to the bus stop as usual , taking his time to think about the events that were going to happen for the rest of the day , Mr, David Will was on his way home, and some how he felt a bit relieved today since he tomorrow was a holiday and he was planing on going to trip with his wife relatives , its going to be a long day , he was thinking while smiling to himself….

 

That smile on Mr.David’s mouth , made John light up with anger he could not hold himself anymore, he was on the other corner of the road waiting the right moment to come , he planned it carefully , it was going to be quick and easy just like a snap , he was wearing a hoodie which made sure that his face was well covered , and before this day comes , John checked all the buildings around this area, there were no cctv cameras , just a couple of old stores whom their shop keepers did not see a need for having a camera after all there was nothing to steal anyway , just some old shops which rarely had any customers as the near by malls were much more attractive to the young generations who preferred buying all the fancy brands..

 

Mr.David came to the bus stop it was 11:58 he looked more relieved , only two minis till the bus arrive, and for his convince there was no one at the bus stop , so he could make himself comfortable , he did not like being with strangers , he preferred  to be alone …

 

John took out the knife, it was a sharp knife , he bought it a few days back from the hunting store near by , he expected it to be satisfying … he was crossing the road trying not to bring any attention towards him , he was heading to the bus stop, avoid contact with the old man as he was walking,,,, when suddenly he stopped ….

 

John was struck there standing in the middle of the road ,he could not move , he wanted to walk to move his leg , but his body betrayed him , he felt as if there was a force holding him down, his eyes were wide open , starring at the horrifying sight just before his eyes , he just could not what was happening in front of him , his mouth was wide open ..

 

On the other side of the road, Mr.David was laying on the ground struck by heart stroke , his legs were kicking in the open air , his body was shaking violently , his hand was pressed tightly on his chest where his heart was , he just could not take the pain , he  remembered what the doctor told him that his diabetes was in a critical stage and he should cut down on sugar , but old David a always he disliked doctors and their long talks, and he thought a sweet doughnut could not do much harm after all ,his wife forbade from eating sweets at home ,and after all it was a good occasion to celebrate with a doughnut ……..

 

That doughnut killed him , but at the same time saved young John from committing the mistake of his life , his mother after spending years with him homeless on the road without much food or shelter  , surely did not want him to spend the rest of his years like his father in prison, probably she was watching over him…

 

 

Advertisements
 

Tags: , , , , , , , , , ,

How to reveal – describe a person character in a Short Story ?

Writing sample: Lamy Vista

Writing sample: Lamy Vista (Photo credit: churl)

 

The characters are a main part of the story , as often the story revolves around them , so a lot of attention should be paid to them while writing your short story.  To have a good characters you should use the right techniques to write them … One of the techniques is how can you revel the personality, the description of the character to your reader , now there are many ways in which you can do that, and it depends on your story which way you should use. Here are some few ways which you can make use of to  reveal your character. I hope this might help you in figuring out the right way to reveal your character.

 

You can reveal the personality of your character through these ways :

 

  • What a character says – dialogue

 

Character dialogue can be in either the character speaks to him/herself, or speak  to another character.The words that the character speak also define the personality of the character ,a scientist character will speak differently from what a poor child character might say , and thats what add a style to the dialogue.

 

  • What character does – actions  

 

The character’s actions and behavior throughout the story defines his characteristics, young characters often do reckless deeds , unlike wise old characters , however the actions of the characters and how the character suppose to act in a particular situation depends on the role of the character in your story.

 

  • What a character thinks – thoughts

 

The character’s thoughts often let the reader know the feelings, and intentions of the character and it makes the reader understand more about the personality of the character.

 

  • What others say about the character

 

Here the characteristics of the character are being described by another character inside the story.

 

  • What the author says about the character

 

In this way the characteristics can be described through the Narrator  of the story.

 

 

 
4 Comments

Posted by on 0 in Notes

 

Tags: , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , ,

How to write a blog review that is Interesting?

How to Write

Image by IvanWalsh.com via Flickr

Have you ever wondered how to write an interesting blog review? and how can you make people like that blog? Here’s how to do it in a few easy steps:

1. Choose a blog that you like , or a blog that interest you.

2. Read the posts of that blog

3. See what is interesting in that blog from your point of view

4. make sure you know some information about the author of the blog ( the blogger )

5. Choose a good title for your (blog review) post

 eg. An interesting blog that I found ……….

      A blog that you must see or (check or know about)………..

6. Start writing your blog review

 For tips on what to include in your review see:

15 point that you must include in your blog review to make it interesting.

7.  After writing your review proof read it

8. Make sure you include a question at the end of the post asking for comments & opinion

9. Publish your post (blog review)

10. Go to the blog owner & inform or comment on their blog:

    I have written a review of your blog ( your post link), tell me what you think of the review?

   ( In this way you will get more traffic to your blog and you will get the opinion of the blogger)

If you have some interesting tips that make blog reviews better, please feel free to share those tips 🙂

 

Tags: , , , , , , , ,

15 point that you must include in your blog review to make it interesting.

Review cards

Image by Ben+Sam via Flickr

Here are some points that you should include in your next blog review if you want your blog review to be interesting.

1. The first thing that came to your mind? When you visited the blog for the first time

2. How did you discover the blog?

3. Some information about the blogger (the author of the blog that you are reviewing)

4.Blog mission ( talk about the mission of the blog)

5. Talk about the  different categories that the blog have ( talk about what each category and its posts)

6. What would you miss if you don’t visit this blog?

7.Why this blog is interesting ( the blog that you are reviewing)

8. Types of content on that blog (videos, pictures,posts,etc..)

9. Desgin of the blog

10.Some interesting posts (add links to the posts that you find interesting and creative)

11. Where do you think this blog will be in the future?

12. For how long the blog  has been around for?

13. Include picture of the blog or Logo

14. Talk about some of the Free stuff offered by the blog

15. Tell the people why did you want to write this review in the first place?

 

Tags: , , , , , , , , ,

Looking for Easy Tools to improve your writing??

Writing

Image by J. Paxon Reyes via Flickr

So if you are looking for easy tools and easy ways to improve your writing , I think I have what you are looking for… here are some tools and tips that I have collected from around the web , why not take a look at them and see if they are really what you are looking for…

50 Tools that can Improve your Writing Skills : here are some handful of tips that have been collected by Dumb Little Man , you will find  50 tips , each tip include a link , these tips can be a great help to you to improve your writing skills.

Also I have included   some useful related articles that can make your writing better.

 
3 Comments

Posted by on 0 in Notes

 

Tags: , , , , , , , ,

how to break down a short story into scenes

Writing

Writing short stories sometimes require you to break your story into parts , each part have a different theme, a different setting , a different kind of description , and these parts are called scences , here is an example of some of the common scenes as Elise Stephens say in her post

Common scenes: An opening scene, a conclusion scene, a flashback scene, a fight scene, a restitution scene.

Scenes make up the parts on which the story is built and developed , if you wan to know more about scenes and how can you come up with some scenes for your next short story , then i think you should see this post:

Writing Scene-by-Scene by Elise Stephens

 
1 Comment

Posted by on 0 in Notes

 

Tags: , , , , , , , , , ,

Poll: What do you want to read in Vix Stories?

 
 

Tags: , , , , , , ,